Self-deprecation is worth its weight in smoldering phoenix-ashes and baby unicorn tears.
or; a story in poetry.
Published on March 29, 2008 By SanChonino In Poetry

Thanks first to Kelly for resurrecting the JUWC.  I'm so sick of what passes as political and religious 'debate' on this site that I'd much prefer writing and reading such as this.

In the OP, I posted a haiku as a joke, saying that was my submission, but then I was bitten by the haiku bug, and today I was finally able to sit down and finish my haiku story.  it's nothing special, but it doesn't suck as bad as I feared it would.

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Two paths, two roads, dark,
filled with scent of foreboding,
rotten apples, fear.

 

Which to choose? Neither?
This tattered corner home holds
mysteries, puzzles.

 

Old man sits on porch,
smiling wickedly, sickly,
teeth rotting, stinking.

 

Should I ask him which?
His years, his memories are
etched across his face.

 

Mouth opens, closes,
fish-like, dumb. I can't speak words;
apprehension rules.

 

The man reads my thoughts.
'Not many come this way, now,
not since the old days.

 

'I've taken both roads -
I've followed each to its end.
It doesn't matter.'

 

'Wait, what do you mean?'
My brow furrows, confused, lost.
'The paths are equal?

 

'Far from it, my boy,
one is filled with life, light, air,
cherry blossoms, love.

 

'The other? Darkness.
Pain. Blood. Suffocation. Tears.
Nothing but remorse.'

 

'No, how can that be?
You said the paths were equal,
I don't understand.'

 

His eyes, rimmed with blood,
black pools of deep nothingness,
meet mine, capture them.

 

'Never said equal,
boy, don't put words in my mouth.
Said “didn't matter”.'

 

'Wait – one sounds dreadful,
the other filled with beauty,
why won't it matter?'

 

His voice cracks, trembles,
'Boy, they end the same – release.
Shuffling off this coil.'

 

My eyes close, thinking.
When opened, the man is gone.
It doesn't matter?

 

One has beauty, life.
The other – sickness, darkness.
Both ending in death.

 

I sit in the chair,
Unable to decide one,
blanketed in cold.

 

Two paths, two roads, dark,
filled with scent of foreboding,
indecision, fear.


Comments (Page 1)
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on Mar 29, 2008
on Mar 29, 2008

Woah...that is some quality writing right there.

Stories in haiku...I've got to try it sometime.

Awesome job, SanCho.

~Zoo

on Mar 29, 2008

That was really great bro.  Nice writing.

on Mar 29, 2008
on Mar 29, 2008

Cool...so when you open your eyes and the old man is gone...do you sit in his chair?  Take his place?

Maybe that house is the end of the road...maybe they aren't beginning there...but ending?

on Mar 29, 2008
Cool...so when you open your eyes and the old man is gone...do you sit in his chair? Take his place?

Maybe that house is the end of the road...maybe they aren't beginning there...but ending?


Good questions all.

Not that I'm going to answer any of them.
on Mar 29, 2008

 

Good questions all. Not that I'm going to answer any of them.

 

 

Nice story!

on Mar 29, 2008

Not that I'm going to answer any of them.

I love doing this to my audience.

~Zoo

on Mar 29, 2008

Very cool indeed.  Well done, mate.

on Mar 29, 2008

This was very cool. Kinda like Stephen King does a haiku.

I really never enjoyed poetry too much, till Buddah. Now you. Thanks for opening my mind.

on Mar 31, 2008

"I took the road less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

 

That's what that reminded me of.  Pity, really.  You wrote it so well...

on Mar 31, 2008
Pity, really.


Wait, what's a pity? I'm confused.
on Mar 31, 2008
That your piece reminded me of that poem. I hate that poem.


But I love you!
on Mar 31, 2008
That your piece reminded me of that poem. I hate that poem.


Ah, dontcha be hatin' on Frost, now.

~Zoo
on Mar 31, 2008
Ah, dontcha be hatin' on Frost, now.


I doubt she hates Frost all together, just that one.

She probably understands what it really means.
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