Niebla - an interpretation

or; song in Aeolian mode, inverted (translated from the original spanish)

Published on September 6, 2006 By SanChonino In Poetry

Mist

If I had decided to escape your twisted love
I could've avoided a lot of this pain

I can see the sparrows, the dew, and the sun!

If you speak to me, I will shut you out of my heart
Because I'm tired of those looks you give me; I'm fed up with the sound of your voice

I can see the sparrows, the dew, and the sun!

I feel blinded by the mist of confusion
I'm fascinated by the clear sky - I've lost all reasoning!
Dammit!

I can see the sparrows, the dew, and the sun!

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(Bad) translation of a poem in spanish, located here.

© 2006 Braeden Jones

Comments

jennifer1

on Sep 06, 2006

Zoologist03

on Sep 06, 2006

It's not a bad translation...it's just that the intricacies in Spanish are hard to express in English...sometimes, anyway.

~Zoo

SanChonino

on Sep 06, 2006

(who says the interpretation is bad!)

I do! For the exact reason that Zoo says . . .

it's just that the intricacies in Spanish are hard to express in English

Yup. Stated nicely. Although, it's not too bad . . . but above all, it just sounds better in spanish. Sexier. (Which is the goal, right?

)

jennifer1

on Sep 07, 2006

foreverserenity

on Sep 10, 2006

Reply By: jennifer1Posted: Thursday, September 07, 2006You two are a couple of old romantics!

Some lucky woman out there will have one of them! Sweet!

I love the poem Braeden. Thank you for translating, to me it's also saying he's fed up and it's time to call it a day! Oh the pain that love brings sometimes.

SanChonino

on Sep 10, 2006

Oh the pain that love brings sometimes.

Isn't it a bittersweet love sometimes! Oh well. I'm still blissfully/painfully single, depending on the day and my mood . . .

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